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What I do

I offer a comprehensive review of your story’s structure, character development, dialogue, plot, and pacing. I provide detailed feedback to help you create a compelling narrative that resonates with your readers. I can help you refine your story to make it the best version possible.

I make comments and suggestions about:


  • Narrative Flow: Is the story moving along at a satisfying pace for the reader, or is it stalling out with too much "business" or detail?  Is every scene and chapter moving the story forward and deepening your characters or theme? Are there "information dumps?" What can be done with them? 

  • Style: What is your “voice” and style, and is it consistent throughout the manuscript compared to other published books with any similarity? Is this style working well to bring this story to life?

  • Logic: Are there any factual or logical errors, bloopers, or contradictions? I will find them. 

  • Character Development: Are your characters believable, three-dimensional, and relatable? Do they change over the course of the story? Is a backstory implied? Is there discovery, adventure and resolution? 

  • Plot Development: Does the plot have clearly established premise with complications, obstacles, conflict, and setbacks? Does the plot resolve, one way or another, in the end? Are subplots effectively developed to support or reflect aspects of the overall plot thematically?

  • Thematic Development: What is your story really about, down deep? Is that articulated on the pages through characters, plot, symbolism, metaphor, and style?

  • Pesky Bits: Are you using your dialogue tags correctly? Are there run-on sentences? Too much telling, not enough showing? Do you repeat the same words unconsciously? Do you have bad writing habits that you are not aware of? I’ll find them.

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